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Old 29-May-2006, 04:02 PM
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I think that it would be better for someone to start again(on this thread)and then see how far we get next time.
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Sure, starting again seems reasonable. This is a very tricky game that requires more effort to get it right. In my mind, THAT is what makes it most worth playing. Concerning the open quote you inserted, there was no other (closing) quote in the story, so I had to read it as a close quote. So let's try again:

eyebrows. The End.
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OK: Setting everything right again through some corrections:

once again Oscar paused, as they we confused, and Oscar repeated what she said: "in the kangaroo court we have false optimism, but in the end we were found guilty because we were." That being So, he undertook the disheartening task of removing bruised lacerated flesh out of the scattered remains of the rocket. Then he gracefully, slowly climbed up, the he fell, but that was before he tried to wobble. The End.

List of Changes: the words "told to" in post 14 have been replaced with "That being". The quotation marks have been relocated (and so has a colon). Acceptable now?

Anton, if you want any changes, edit this post of mine, so you don't have to post again.

EDIT: Darn, I missed the second page. If you wanna start again, it's ok. But there will be mistkes. We're not gonna start again everytime, are we?
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We're not gonna start again everytime, are we?
I don't have a problem with that. In improv school we have some difficult games that require getting everything exactly right, or else you have to go back. That would make this a game that exercises some different kinds of thinking than the other games around here, which just for the sake of variety would be good. But I think it would be good also, because it will result in some interesting short stories. Backward writing games are very difficult, but worth it.

So, once again I post the end of our second story:

eyebrows. The End.
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*Agrees with Anton*

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