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Originally Posted by 01101001
Pretty good overall. I got the plot. Good exposition. It's hard to tell a story in 5 minutes. Stood up to silent viewing.
I'm mostly into niggling geeky details.
Too much headroom in some shots. A little shaky where it probably shouldn't have been. Some zooms were too fast and sloppy. Got a little tired of the fade-down/fade-up transitions. Sometimes heads were missing -- but fine if it was tension-raising intentional. Need more cuts on the beat; let the music motivate the editing. Lighting or settings, I think in guy's room didn't provide enough contrast, and it's hard to shoot indoors with a bright window in the background.
Liked the split-screen. Pretty good actors for kids -- but of course that was the director's magic, right?
Better than I would have done.
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Thanks :-).
Yah, after burning it to a DVD, and then ripping it to my home computer, and then posting to youtube.... the music for some reason got knocked out of place. It USED to be synched up to most of the events (particularly on the cymbals crashing).
And this was the first video I've ever shot/edited/what have you. Soooo, I wasn't expecting much to begin with. And I was really limited on time, so I shot it very fast (and thus, quality suffered). And I was still learning the camera (which is just a crappy one my father picked up from walmart a few years back), so that accounts for the sloppy zooms. I learned a lot from this project though, so my next endeavors will probaby improve in the above areas you mentioned.
I appreciate the constructive criticism! It helps me see where I need to focus more. However, I think most of the above mistakes can be improved greatly if I wasn't pressed for time on this particular project.
Haha, also, you might have noticed things going wrong in the background in some scenes; my friend can be seen in the far left holding a light when the couple are eating dinner before she dissapears, and also--in the final scenes of the guy approaching the girl's house, you can see her sitting in the shade of her garage in the left (hey, in the arizona heat, I dont blame her lol). There are other mistakes and stuff. But hey, not bad for my absolute first video.
Thanks for viewing and commenting!
Edit: Oh, also.. Their clothes change periodically! haha. Like I said, this isn't supposed to be professional, its just a simple project to learn basic video editing/shooting/etc.